Thursday, September 16, 2010

The 3 Sisters

THE THREE SISTERS
In the jungle there lived three sisters. There names are Olivia, Emma and Elise. Elise is mean. They hated living in there because there are big ugly scary monsters, owls and also snakes. They hate scary creatures .
Emma, Elise and Olivia had nothing to eat they eat worms and snakes [gross.] The snakes are too chewy Elise keeps saying .”Well it’s going to have to do’’ said Olivia “yeah yeah” all right “.If we had a phone Emma sighed “ we could ring some of friends but we don`t .Lets go for a little walk around ok but be careful” .”No” said Elise” I’m staying here so I don’t see the monsters OK bye”.
Off Olivia and Emma went looking for help. Then they found a wood cutter he was there hunting for snakes, monsters, giant worms and owls they are all wild, hurtful and sneaky. But the girls that went for a walk didn’t see any of those creepy animals. But where Elise was the monsters were there.
Elise called for help, the other two sisters heard Elise, they found a little hole that was the way out of the jungle and back home. They drove home safe and sound in their silver car that they found in a junk yard and they fixed it up. They made it their own car forever.

By Emilee

5 comments:

  1. it was good because you did speechmarks in the right spot.Maybe you can say that the people are like in it next time

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  2. You'r story is fantastic because you used descrbing words.

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  3. Good luck for the write and read finals Emilee!

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  4. well done emilee your story is great

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  5. I just read your story
    I thourt it is fantastic
    you had detail detailed words
    and had good


    puntiatoin

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